寄李十二白二十韻(節(jié)選)

昔年有狂客，

號(hào)爾謫仙人。

筆落驚風(fēng)雨，

詩(shī)成泣鬼神。

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第一版(意思出來(lái)了韻律不行)

To Li Bai

Once there came a talent unrestrained,

And is called as the Immortal Banished.

Where his brush falls shakes wind and rain,

For his poem both gods and ghosts weep and wail.

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韻律策略：4行詩(shī)，隔行壓韻，4音步，抑揚(yáng)格

第二版(韻律不行)

To Li Bai

Once there came a talent unrestrained,

Called as the Immortal Banished from heaven.

On paper his brush falls, on heaven shake wind and rain,

For his poem both gods and ghosts lament.

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第三版（韻律勉強(qiáng)，但有些不擇手段）

To Li Bai

Once there came a talent untamed,

And known as the Immortal Banished.

When his brush falls wind and rain shake,

Whose poem makes gods and ghosts weepish.

太難了，有別的事要忙，暫時(shí)譯到這。

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